So, I'm grateful that you've started up this project again, and have been enjoying it so far. That said, I'm not crazy about this page for the following reasons:
- Wearing zero clothing below the waist is cute in certain settings, and you've mined that nicely in the past, but it just doesn't work here IMO, the same way it wouldn't work in various other enclosed commercial buildings. Logistically it's wandering in to the absurd (even for Pearl), and could well cause a bunch of unhappy consequences and complications both for her and for the business.
- There was an opportunity here to depict a short adventure of the girls out bowling, for whatever that might have been worth, but instead it just got turned in to a throwaway event. As if you simply wander in to a bowling alley, throw a couple frames, then wander back out. Not that bowling is an overly complicated kind of event, necessitating a lot of buildup and development, but this page makes it look like little more than a kiosk one might stop by for a moment. It's just a little too jarring for me, and apologies in advance-- lazy.
Apologies for my negativity, and keep up the great work, otherwise. Cheers.
I get where you’re coming from, gigantes, however, I choose to put a little different spin on it. First of all, it’s a fantasy comic, which means we can dispense with most real-world conventions. If I want, I can imagine that Pearl, being a skilled illusionist, can make it seem to most people that her outfit, although somewhat unusual for a young woman, is nevertheless long enough to cover her lower parts and make people think she’s at least wearing panties. Only the low angle of the second frame and her excitedly raised arms in the third reveal otherwise. Presumably, nobody around them noticed. Anyway, the whole premise of this episode is to advance the transition to grandma’s where Sabina hopefully can recall her grant subject. But then I’m easily pleased with this comic, there’s just something about their innocent looking faces juxtaposed with casual nudity and sexy hijinks!
> First of all, it’s a fantasy comic, which means we can dispense with most real-world conventions.
I really can't agree with that. Inky's other two strips are far more the fantasy strips. This one, while whimsical, and consisting of certain flights of fancy, is very much rooted in familiar reality. That's part of why we so quickly grasp and relate to so much of what's going on.
> If I want, I can imagine that Pearl, being a skilled illusionist, can make it seem to most people that her outfit, although somewhat unusual for a young woman, is nevertheless long enough to cover her lower parts and make people think she’s at least wearing panties.
That's an angle I hadn't considered. Pretty nifty. It would also make any of her previously (possibly) awkward prior instances of her nudity a non-issue. The world just doesn't notice, due to her spell. A bit like the "Butterscotch" principle by Manara, if you're familiar with that classic.
> Anyway, the whole premise of this episode is to advance the transition to grandma’s where Sabina hopefully can recall her grant subject.
Yeah, nah. It's just too lazy, as is. Two - three pages would have been fine. They could have been doing anything else here, if there was some urgent rush to get to the next place. AFAIK this comic is not produced under any circumstances of a 'rush.'
InkDolls, the story remains the way it's ever been: simple, but good erotic situations, and that's the way we like it. We can understand Gigantes' point of view, but this is a ficticious story and they live in a ficticious world, which means that somehow nudity may be normally allowed, even in public, except when the people around "notice" it just to make the situation funnier, but that's as much an exception as a rule. Actually that's what has been making your novel adventures so funny and unique in the whole Web so far.
@Odiamp Deebe, I don't think that adhering to a certain amount of internal logic and consistencies is a bad thing. For example, in recent pages, there was a funny sequence in which Mar's and Sunny's intimate time was threatened by Sunny's fixation with a malfunctioning clock. It created an interesting quandary and sense of suspense-- would we the readers wind up losing that little glimpse in to their private sexy time? Would Mar (almost inevitably) become offended? Would there be further fallout and complications, like Sunny having to find ways to make it up somehow?
That's what I would call good writing for this kind of strip-- not deep, not complicated, but lightly suspenseful and a bit titillating.
See, part of why I think Ink Dolls has been so good for so long is because it's handled that kind of thing skillfully. It's been a bit like a telenovela, but without as much melodrama and with more of a light, pleasant, sexy air. But IMO it wouldn't have been nearly so fun if nothing had really mattered, and it had been simply a kind of strip show with young girls parading through a bunch of venues and situations that didn't really matter.
So, I'm grateful that you've started up this project again, and have been enjoying it so far. That said, I'm not crazy about this page for the following reasons:
- Wearing zero clothing below the waist is cute in certain settings, and you've mined that nicely in the past, but it just doesn't work here IMO, the same way it wouldn't work in various other enclosed commercial buildings. Logistically it's wandering in to the absurd (even for Pearl), and could well cause a bunch of unhappy consequences and complications both for her and for the business.
- There was an opportunity here to depict a short adventure of the girls out bowling, for whatever that might have been worth, but instead it just got turned in to a throwaway event. As if you simply wander in to a bowling alley, throw a couple frames, then wander back out. Not that bowling is an overly complicated kind of event, necessitating a lot of buildup and development, but this page makes it look like little more than a kiosk one might stop by for a moment. It's just a little too jarring for me, and apologies in advance-- lazy.
Apologies for my negativity, and keep up the great work, otherwise. Cheers.
I just assumed they were in foreign lands
It's inspired on a mishmash of locations. But yes, foreign to them all.
I get where you’re coming from, gigantes, however, I choose to put a little different spin on it. First of all, it’s a fantasy comic, which means we can dispense with most real-world conventions. If I want, I can imagine that Pearl, being a skilled illusionist, can make it seem to most people that her outfit, although somewhat unusual for a young woman, is nevertheless long enough to cover her lower parts and make people think she’s at least wearing panties. Only the low angle of the second frame and her excitedly raised arms in the third reveal otherwise. Presumably, nobody around them noticed. Anyway, the whole premise of this episode is to advance the transition to grandma’s where Sabina hopefully can recall her grant subject. But then I’m easily pleased with this comic, there’s just something about their innocent looking faces juxtaposed with casual nudity and sexy hijinks!
Heh heh, the kind of "magic" effect Pearl has on her male onlookers is not related to wizardry.
> First of all, it’s a fantasy comic, which means we can dispense with most real-world conventions.
I really can't agree with that. Inky's other two strips are far more the fantasy strips. This one, while whimsical, and consisting of certain flights of fancy, is very much rooted in familiar reality. That's part of why we so quickly grasp and relate to so much of what's going on.
> If I want, I can imagine that Pearl, being a skilled illusionist, can make it seem to most people that her outfit, although somewhat unusual for a young woman, is nevertheless long enough to cover her lower parts and make people think she’s at least wearing panties.
That's an angle I hadn't considered. Pretty nifty. It would also make any of her previously (possibly) awkward prior instances of her nudity a non-issue. The world just doesn't notice, due to her spell. A bit like the "Butterscotch" principle by Manara, if you're familiar with that classic.
> Anyway, the whole premise of this episode is to advance the transition to grandma’s where Sabina hopefully can recall her grant subject.
Yeah, nah. It's just too lazy, as is. Two - three pages would have been fine. They could have been doing anything else here, if there was some urgent rush to get to the next place. AFAIK this comic is not produced under any circumstances of a 'rush.'
Thank you for taking the time to write some fair critique, it's always helpful. I don't take any negativity from it.
I'm aware of my shortcommings and I do often feel uneasy and insecure when posting.
It's true that the situation on this page could be uncomfortable.
InkDolls, the story remains the way it's ever been: simple, but good erotic situations, and that's the way we like it. We can understand Gigantes' point of view, but this is a ficticious story and they live in a ficticious world, which means that somehow nudity may be normally allowed, even in public, except when the people around "notice" it just to make the situation funnier, but that's as much an exception as a rule. Actually that's what has been making your novel adventures so funny and unique in the whole Web so far.
@Odiamp Deebe,
I don't think that adhering to a certain amount of internal logic and consistencies is a bad thing. For example, in recent pages, there was a funny sequence in which Mar's and Sunny's intimate time was threatened by Sunny's fixation with a malfunctioning clock. It created an interesting quandary and sense of suspense-- would we the readers wind up losing that little glimpse in to their private sexy time? Would Mar (almost inevitably) become offended? Would there be further fallout and complications, like Sunny having to find ways to make it up somehow?
That's what I would call good writing for this kind of strip-- not deep, not complicated, but lightly suspenseful and a bit titillating.
See, part of why I think Ink Dolls has been so good for so long is because it's handled that kind of thing skillfully. It's been a bit like a telenovela, but without as much melodrama and with more of a light, pleasant, sexy air. But IMO it wouldn't have been nearly so fun if nothing had really mattered, and it had been simply a kind of strip show with young girls parading through a bunch of venues and situations that didn't really matter.
Of course Pearl. No pants= no pressure. You need to try that again Sabina.
She can accomplish big things with a simple attire change.