Insecure Mar finds herself running out of hate ammo against Sabina after finding a video file.
I wish I could have done a better work with the dialogs, which I have tried again and again, for years. These drawings are several years old (with recent retouching), but even if the general idea is clear, my poor writing skills were just stalling the publishing of this strip.
As for story continuity the strip is going nice, just as I can expect from slice-of-life kind of comic. However there is a lot unanswered questions throughout the story and I don’t get the feeling that they will be answered. Maybe that is hurting the continuity feel.
I never noticed that Mar had something against Sabina. I think she is just normal and Sabina too crazy
Somehow my brain can’t stop thinking that there is hand coming out of the computer screen on the last panel.
Thank you Mr Spy (hehe)! Yes you have a point! There are too many open questions for such a linear and simple story! I will move some of the answers to an earlier point than originally planned and stop bringing in new ones.
Also, the first part of your comment, coming from you, had the side effect of taking off a burden of insecurity. I know, silly me.
(and by comics that had me clueless I meant Hunter Dogs)
Nothing to be insecure about man, you’re doing a great job!
Sorry to trick you with Hunter Dogs ^^
personally, i like the slightly off language. i dont know why but it just fits.
Wow an introspective Sabina!
I don’t see the problem with the writing..Do you mean the xhole plot, or just the dialogs?
As for the dialogs, you can really do better…Young people talking, you can’t expect much, and more worked dialogs could sound a little fishy.
As for the plot evolution..yeah, there’s something, i must admit that i never know where you’re heading to…Separatly, the strips are funny, and overall it’s good, but i’m kinda lost concerning the whole story. But yeah, it’s kinda hard to assembly all idead in one and solid block.
Thanks for your input!
Angs: I know what you mean, I have been on the other side, feeling clueless when following an ongoing comic.